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Task : We are Australians - English in citizenship, community and cultural identity: Speech

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We are Australians - English in citizenship, community and cultural identity: Speech - Alex (90-100)

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This response demonstrated a well-developed conceptual understanding of the concept of citizenship, community and cultural identity, using evidence of research to support ideas. It engages the audience with a strong personal voice using the conventions of persuasive language such as the rhetorical question. The response maintains effective control of language and sustains a coherent and logical structure. This work sample demonstrates characteristics of work typically produced by a student performing within the mark range of 90–100.

We are Australians

Did you know that statistics show more people are becoming Australian Citizens each year than there are babies being born in Australia?

Because of Australia's laid back attitudes, freedom of speech and religion more and more people are finding Australia a great place to call home. Becoming a Citizen is more acceptable than ever with many reasons for people to become Australian. People in the remote and country areas of Australia seem to have a sheltered life and are biased opinion to what an Australian is because they do not get the opportunity to go to school or work with people that are Australian Citizens, migrated from other countries. Being Australian doesn't mean that you have to speak 'Australian English' such as mate, G'day, she'll be right. Are you one of the country people that only seem to see the stereotypical Australians with the Akubra hat?

Did you know that in Australia over 260 languages are spoken, I didn't! It just proves how multicultural Australia is.

Think about the last place you had dinner at while in the city? Was it Italian, Chinese, Japanese, Moroccan, even Spanish? Perhaps it was only had MacDonalds? MacDonalds is American. Everywhere you look you see different religions and beliefs. Australians seem to easily accept others cultures through there palates but not easily accept their religion, beliefs and work ethics, or even how they raise their children.

Step into the Asylum seekers shoes just for a minute? Everyone is quick to think that they are horrible people; they should be sent away and kept in captive on Christmas island far away from mainland Australia. But what we are doing to these individuals and families is unethical and un-Australian. They are people that come from war torn countries, poor villages, dirty (or no) homes and we lock them away like they have no rights as a person. Even if they are not aware of the right ways to enter the country they do not deserve to be locked up with no space to move or only two meals a day. Wouldn't you expect and demand a fair trial if all you were after were freedom of speech?

Next time you see someone of a different nationality, think about the hardship that they went through to become an Australia Citizen and to have a freedom of speech, they are people looking for a better life. Wouldn't you want respect if you tried for a better life in another country?

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