Work Sample : Jerry

Activity : Recount

    Recount - Jerry : Grade Commentary

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Jerry has demonstrated sound knowledge and understanding of the structure and features of a recount. There is no evidence of planning but sequencing of events is adequate. The introduction is appropriate and an attempt at a re-orientation with an evaluative comment has been made, but the conclusion could be stronger. An attempt at paragraphing has been made, and there is adequate use of language features such as time connectives and conjunctions. The grammatical features and punctuation are mostly appropriate for the text type but an overuse of adjectives in parts detracts from the overall effectiveness. An adequate range of strategies has been used to spell most words. The handwriting is of consistent size and slope in NSW Foundation Style. To improve, Jerry could include more adverbs, use complex sentences and edit punctuation carefully. This work sample demonstrates characteristics of work typically produced by a student performing at grade C standard midway through Stage 2.

Grade C

The student has a sound knowledge and understanding of the main areas of content and has achieved an adequate level of competence in the processes and skills.

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Foundation Statement strands

The following strands are covered in this activity:

  • Writing
    Students write well-structured literary and factual texts in terms of topic, purpose, audience and language by drafting, revising and proofreading. They use accurate sentence structure, grammatical features and punctuation conventions to produce various texts and spell familiar and unfamiliar words using knowledge of letter-sound correspondence, common letter patterns and a range of other strategies. Students use joined letters when writing in NSW Foundation Style and develop basic desktop publishing skills. Students explain how they structure their writing to achieve intended purposes.
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