Work Sample : Kim

Activity : Narrative

    Narrative - Kim : Grade Commentary

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Kim has demonstrated thorough knowledge and understanding of the structure and features of a narrative. The text has been effectively organised in paragraphs but there is some inconsistency in sequencing and sentence structure. A variety of conjunctions and connectives have been used, and the language is descriptive. Although there is no evidence of planning or drafting, simple punctuation has been accurately used and there is some experimentation with possessive apostrophes and direct speech. A range of strategies has been used to spell familiar and unfamiliar words but there is little evidence of editing. To improve, Kim could include figurative language and develop more complexity in the narrative by expanding ideas. This work sample demonstrates characteristics of work typically produced by a student performing at grade B standard midway through Stage 2.

Grade B

The student has a thorough knowledge and understanding of the content and a high level of competence in the processes and skills. In addition, the student is able to apply this knowledge and these skills to most situations.

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Foundation Statement strands

The following strands are covered in this activity:

  • Writing
    Students write well-structured literary and factual texts in terms of topic, purpose, audience and language by drafting, revising and proofreading. They use accurate sentence structure, grammatical features and punctuation conventions to produce various texts and spell familiar and unfamiliar words using knowledge of letter-sound correspondence, common letter patterns and a range of other strategies. Students use joined letters when writing in NSW Foundation Style and develop basic desktop publishing skills. Students explain how they structure their writing to achieve intended purposes.
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