My Story, Your Story - Drew : Grade Commentary
Drew has demonstrated an adequate level of competence in composing an imaginative narrative on the contribution of Ernie Dingo to Australian society. Links between the research and narrative aspects of response have been made. A sense of personal engagement and cultural understanding is evident. The structure is sound with a clear orientation creating a sense of time and place but the response at times lacks cohesiveness. There is an adequate sense of character and narrative voice, although the focus is more on writing about the filming than on character. At times the syntax is odd and a lack of awareness of the reader is apparent through the use of incorrect vocabulary and poor control of expression. Some of the ideas and language choices are clichéd. This work sample demonstrates characteristics of work typically produced by a student performing at grade C standard at the end of Stage 4.
Grade C
The student has a sound knowledge and understanding of the main areas of content and has achieved an adequate level of competence in the processes and skills.
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